Haiku – wouldn’t it be nice

Same structure as before, three more Haiku poems also reading as a larger one. Inspiration, using a word prompt from a song same as on this post. This one takes a line from The Beach Boys track “Wouldn’t it be nice” (from their album often rated as one of the best albums of all time e.g. number two in the Rolling Stone list, “Pet Sounds”). Check out the original video for the song, below. The line I used is the title, wouldn’t it be nice.

I never see you
work our fingers to the bone
tired and hungry

Where did we go to?
people we were when we met
when our dreams were young

get away from here
hold me in your arms and fly
wouldn’t it be nice?

Lexicon word of the day: accoutre.


7 comments on “Haiku – wouldn’t it be nice

  1. Jeannie says:

    Love these Elliot!

  2. crubin says:

    I really liked this collection. I think we can all relate to the words.

  3. jmmcdowell says:

    Nothing wrong with being sentimental from time to time. And when people can identify with the words and thoughts, you’ve done a good job, I think.

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