100 word fiction – The event, part 1

Something is coming…

I’m struggling to keep up with blog time at the moment, but here is a 100 word fiction I wrote a week or two ago. If you missed an earlier post such as “Jack and the beanstalk – revised“, the three rules for 100 word fiction are as follows:

  • It must be 100 words or less.
  • The prompt will be mentioned after the story.
  • It must be written in under 30 mins and then it goes up onto a post as is, with no additional editing allowed, no pondering on it for a day or more.

The Event

Matt tried to relax, but couldn’t escape that sinking feeling in his gut. There had been warnings, there had been that eerie sense. He had been told the event was coming. It was going to be life changing.

 He looked at Carol, standing the opposite end of a box, that she began to open.
“This is none of that soapy goop, the real deal”, she said
Matt took a slow breath and reached into the box. He spotted the piece he wanted, picked it up, and slowly inserted it into his mouth. Carol smiled.
“It’s amazing chocolate isn’t it?”.

Prompt: The commercial for the NBC show “The Event”. It is kind of annoying, it promises a lot and I suspect delivers little.

Lexicon word of the day: invidious.

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13 comments on “100 word fiction – The event, part 1

  1. He he ….. Very good 🙂

    Xx

  2. Great 100 word story, especially with the tie in of your thoughts on the advertisement for “The Event”. Loved it.

  3. jmmcdowell says:

    Amazing chocolate wouldn’t be bad compensation, though. 🙂 Much better than a big build up resulting in . . . stale crackers, for example.

    • Elliot says:

      From what I have heard “stale crackers” is a good summation of the various reviews of the event.

      I always like to take the chance to have a dig at Hersheys chocolate.

  4. Smaktakula says:

    I haven’t seen the commercial, but I enjoyed the short fiction. I think attempting to write with various word limits is a tremendous exercise, as it forces the author to practice trimming away the unnecessary fat. Too often in their writing, authors will attempt to employ a surfeit of words as a substitute for clear, incisive writing. The shorter format of this exercise helps ensure a leaner, better writer.

    Invidious is an awesom word.

    • Smaktakula says:

      Spell check really let me down there. That’s who I blame anyway.

      • Elliot says:

        The commercial is a bit like how you tempt a toddler to do something they do not want to do: “Oooo Look what’s over here” etc. What I’ve heard about the show suggests it is also like how you tempt a toddler to do what they don’t want to do, but from the toddlers perspective.

        I do like this as an exercise, pretty much for the reasons you state, but on occasion I wish I had a few more words. It is much the opposite doing a larger piece, leaving things in until someone tells you to remove it. So the obvious thing is to carry the idea across.

        I read somewhere that keeping a rough target for chapters e.g. 2,000 words, serves several purposes, but one of them would be to cut the flab.

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